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Wednesday, 21 November 2018

NEVER BEEN SEEN!!

Hello everybody in New Zealand and my name is called Lillian and Im sure some of you girls and boys might know me from Wesley primary school.This Blog post will be about a story that I made up.The thing I learned about this is how to join stories into one story.The challenging thing was I tried to get some of the most emotional movies I watched before and add it together.My next steps are using more punctuation. So this is the story that I made I hope you guys like it.!
Never been seen . . .
There once was a man that met this beautiful girl. How did he meet her? Well this is how he met her.
The boys name was called Alex. Alex and his father had worked for this father and his daughter.
The father that the dad had worked for was rich and so Alex saw the girl sitting on the table and
learning how to hold a teacup in a fancy way. Alex got a cup and pretended he was holding a cup too. But then Alex was so funny that he made the girl spit. The father saw and told his daughter to “come. It was my fault”Alex said. Well thank you for being honesty but this unexpected moment came. . .


SLAP TO THE FACE!!!! Alex's dad was right behind him but he didn't want to say anything because
he didn't want to be rude. Alex went to the beach that wasn't far from the girls home. The girl came sat
down next to him quietly. “What's your name?” asked Alex , “My name is Charity.” Alex went back
home with a happy face but when he came home he found out that his father was in pain and felt like he
was going to die. A few days later Alex's dad died and alex was homeless in the streets but the thing that
always made him happy was that he would sent letters to Charity and Charity will sent letters back.
20 years later. . .


Alex would still remember about charity so one day he came to charities house and took her for a day of
with him. When they were getting In loved Charity got pregnant to 1 kids name James. Charity’s house
was theirs but Charity’s parents were still living there. The house was actually for rent but they didn’t have
too much money to pay because caroline was losing breath but they have no money to take her to hospital.
So Alex packed his stuff and said goodbye to james and charity and went looking for a job. 1 day later he
found these people that clean shops and restaurants so he had that job but everyone was so guilty,selfish
and he felt like he was getting bullied so he quit.


He remembered his family and came back.He came back and saw the house that was beautiful and
clean but when he was outside through the window he saw his wife charity hugging a guy.But he knocked
on the house door and saw the wife with tears coming down from her eyes as soon as she saw him. We
need to talk said Alex. Yea sure replied charity.Whos that you were hugging asked Alex , It's our son and
that is when he knew that he was 20 years and forever they will live happily ever after!!!

The end!!!!!!!!! Thank you for reading!
Challenge : In the 2 paragraphs can you tell me witch movie did it came from?Comment down bellow!

4 comments:

  1. Great effort. So this is a summary of a film? What parts of your writing are you proud of and what are your next steps? (ideas, punctuation, spelling, vocab...)

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  2. Punctuation Mr I wrote it on my blog post by the way!Thanks!!

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    1. Hi Lillian it's me Sina (your friend) I think the movie is for the two paragraphs is The Greatest Showmen because I saw the movie and when I read it sounded like the movie is The Greatest Showmen.

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    2. Great job. The movie for the 2 paragraphs is . . .
      The Greatest Showman witch you got it right.
      Thank you for guessing.

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